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I knew the old stories. The first man and woman had disobeyed, and so they had been driven out of paradise. An angel had been placed in paradise to guard the tree.

I never heard any stories saying he left the garden.

I went to find the tree, to see if it really was worth getting kicked out of paradise. I’d seen the Fountain of Youth, Atlantis, and the Holy Grail. This was the next big thing. It was the edge of the Earth and beyond. It was further than Davy Jones’ Locker. It was paradise.

Some people told me the Holy Grail and the Fountain of Youth were the same thing. If you drank from the Holy Grail, you wouldn’t die. If you drank from the Fountain of Youth, you wouldn’t die. But I’ve seen them before. The Holy Grail is an ugly brown wooden cup. The Fountain of Youth isn’t more than a pool of stale water in the middle of a cave in South America. Atlantis was less of a disappointment, but it wanted to remain hidden. So I ventured out for the Garden of Eden, paradise, and the tree.

It was a journey that would take three lifetimes. I had a few extra to spare. When the world was a desolate place, deserted of mankind after a flood the likes of which we’d never seen before, you had time to spare for everything. Man didn’t deserve to be on this planet. Man didn’t deserve the Fountain of Youth, or the tree of life. We didn’t deserve paradise.

But I was going to find it. I was going to conquer it. I was going to take it.

It took three lifetimes to find the garden. I had fallen off the edge of the Earth to find it. I had gone further than Davy Jones’ Locker. I had died three times to finally see the garden.

I stood on the other side of a crystal clear stream, bubbling gently over stones. The garden had no gates. The river was its boundary. Its border. Its gate. I could see the tree from where I stood. It didn’t stand out from the others, didn’t bear fruit of extraordinary kind. I recognize it by the figure standing sentry in front of it, dull blade in its dead hand.

The angel. He wore dusty armour. A shield hung off his back. As I stared, the bones in his hand cracked. The blade fell to the ground at his feet. He was only a skeleton. I had lived three lifetimes to get to this point and he had died eons ago. The tree was unguarded.

The stream parted beneath my feet. Fresh flesh. Clean. Pure. Alive. The skeleton stared lifelessly as I passed. The fragile bones in its wings stretched twelve feet across. I picked up the sword. The dull blade was light as a feather, light as air. It no longer flamed. It no longer warded off mankind. I was the last. It didn’t recognize me.

I plucked a fruit from the tree and took a bite.

It was knowledge.
Flash Fiction - July 14

“[...]He placed on the east side of the Garden of Eden cherubim and a flaming sword flashing back and forth to guard the way to the tree of life.” Genesis 3:24, NIV.

Well I wrote a thing.

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mycrimsonheart "manages to say something profound in very little space" (suggester's words) in Eden's Angel. ( Suggested by creativelycliche and Featured by neurotype )
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TuesdayNightCompany Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2014
I liked it.
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Omnivoyance Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014
Gained knowledge from the tree of life? Not sure what you're going for with that. 
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mycrimsonheart Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I recognize my mistakes, as minor as they may be. But perhaps you might have noticed in other comments that I realized my mistake. Perhaps this story is fiction and isn't meant to reflect what one might or might not gain from eating fruit from either tree. Perhaps one can gain knowledge from immortality. Who knows. Perhaps those trees never existed. Fiction, myth. Not necessarily true. 
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Omnivoyance Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2014
No, I wasn't trying to point out a mistake. I assumed it was a twist on the established imagery and mythos meant to provoke thought in some general direction or another. But my sleepy mind refused to suggest what that might be in the time I had allotted to enjoy this piece. I enjoyed the story and thought it deserved some kind of comment. The last thought it caused was a question so I went with that. I thank you for responding in person with your authors "behinds the scenes" insight on the matter. I'm sorry if my comment came off as abrasive. I really did enjoy it and I thank you for sharing it with us. 
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mycrimsonheart Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I'm sorry if I appeared rude earlier, but I do appreciate you reading it. Thank you =)
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Omnivoyance Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2014
:) 
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That1PersonYouForgot Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This story captured me from the first line until the last. Very well done in such small space. Congrats on the DD, it was very well earned~ :heart:
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mycrimsonheart Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! =)
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That1PersonYouForgot Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You are very welcome, keep up the great work :)
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tommyboywood Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Interesting mythological spin.  You might check out my similar take in "The Seeker," in my spiritual folder
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TSSOCM Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014  Student General Artist
It's a very good story! I very much enjoyed it! ~Lash
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mycrimsonheart Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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laurotica Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014   Writer
Absolutely wonderful and vibrant work!  I really enjoy short pieces that pack a punch, and you've done it.  Congrats on a well-deserved DD :)
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mycrimsonheart Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This means so much to me, thank you!
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Grimmijaggers Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
I find this story interesting, but angels can't die...so... ^^"
But otherwise, it's interesting!
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mycrimsonheart Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks =)
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lildreamer6281 Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014
Your story ran through my body like a storm but it was a fresh feeling. Gave me a jump in my step. Thank you.
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mycrimsonheart Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! =)
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siedhr Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014  Student Writer
I liked it. A tad hurried and choppy, but very concise and striking. The end is a bit of a let down for me. Needs more punch.
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mycrimsonheart Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I've been tweaking it, but otherwise thank you =)
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siedhr Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014  Student Writer
Looking forward to reading it. And the rest of your work as well. :)
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xXMUSICstar120Xx Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I love this story.
Awesome job!
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mycrimsonheart Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks!
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Toetag001 Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014
Cherubim is plural. There were two angels.

Pretty good :)
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mycrimsonheart Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks for that note =)
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MamaELM Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014  Professional General Artist
:D Love this! I love the short choppy seeming sentences, as if the teller is bored now, mumbling about what they did. One thing annoyed me a bit though, that you mentioned Davy Jones' locker twice, it seemed redundant. Other than that though its awesome!
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mycrimsonheart Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks =) I'm working on fixing it up, so that is something I will keep in mind, thank you.
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warlord10 Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014
Very interesting. Just one note tho - the guarded tree was the tree of eternal life (Gen 3.22).
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mycrimsonheart Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks for that note =)
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Tales-of-Tao Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014  Student General Artist
Absolutely intriguing, and very well-written! Congratulations on a well-deserved DD. :squee:
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mycrimsonheart Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! Much appreciated =)
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Tales-of-Tao Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014  Student General Artist
:nod:
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rafun1312 Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I love the idea that the last human wouldn't even be recognized as one. Awesom!
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mycrimsonheart Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks!
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MarkEli Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014
Well this is very interesting!
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mycrimsonheart Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks :)
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DarcyM123 Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014
Great read.

Apart from Genesis, this also made me think of quite a few other things alone the way.

Amongst them was the Indianna Jones film, "the Last Crusade", the film "The Fountain", and maybe a shade of Shelly's "the Last Man".
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mycrimsonheart Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! "The Last Crusade" is what inspired the holy grail references, actually =) I haven't heard of those others, though.
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DarcyM123 Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014
Hope you are having a good weekend.

The Fountain is something you might like to take a look at. Hugh Jackman and Rachel Wise. Its a few years old, now, and gets mixed reviews, but I think you would like it. Goes through 3 timespans, about a man looking for the cure to life.

Shelly's book, is not the greatest. Definitely, not another Frankenstein I'm afraid.
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DeviantDevil221 Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014
OH MY GOB!!THAT IS SO AWESOME THERE IS NOT A WORD THAT IS AWESOME ENOUGH TO CALL IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!(@_@)(my mind has been  boggled)
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mycrimsonheart Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Oh my goodness thank you so much! You're making me giddy =)
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TahiraKitty Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014  Student Digital Artist
I love it!!! its amazing!!! im totally gonna fave this!!! you totally deserved the DD!!!
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mycrimsonheart Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Oh my, thank you! I'm so honoured =)
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TheAstrologist Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014
Beautiful. :heart: Congrats on the DD!! :party:

-Elizabeth
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mycrimsonheart Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much =) 
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neurotype Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
That last line was just perfect. Overall, great style - the varied sentence structure is doing a lot :D
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mycrimsonheart Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! This means a lot to me =)
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C-A-Harland Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2013  Student Writer
I love the short sentences and structure you use in this, you manage to convey so much with so few words. It's also an interesting idea and spin on the story that the guarding angel should perish at his post.
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mycrimsonheart Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Ooh, thank you so much!
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TheChesherCat Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh this is brilliant... so original, and I love the character's voice! Wonderful storytelling :clap:
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