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I knew the old stories. The first man and woman had disobeyed, and so they had been driven out of paradise. An angel had been placed in paradise to guard the tree.

I never heard any stories saying he left the garden.

I went to find the tree, to see if it really was worth getting kicked out of paradise. I’d seen the Fountain of Youth, Atlantis, and the Holy Grail. This was the next big thing. It was the edge of the Earth and beyond. It was further than Davy Jones’ Locker. It was paradise.

Some people told me the Holy Grail and the Fountain of Youth were the same thing. If you drank from the Holy Grail, you wouldn’t die. If you drank from the Fountain of Youth, you wouldn’t die. But I’ve seen them before. The Holy Grail is an ugly brown wooden cup. The Fountain of Youth isn’t more than a pool of stale water in the middle of a cave in South America. Atlantis was less of a disappointment, but it wanted to remain hidden. So I ventured out for the Garden of Eden, paradise, and the tree.

It was a journey that would take three lifetimes. I had a few extra to spare. When the world was a desolate place, deserted of mankind after a flood the likes of which we’d never seen before, you had time to spare for everything. Man didn’t deserve to be on this planet. Man didn’t deserve the Fountain of Youth, or the tree of life. We didn’t deserve paradise.

But I was going to find it. I was going to conquer it. I was going to take it.

It took three lifetimes to find the garden. I had fallen off the edge of the Earth to find it. I had gone further than Davy Jones’ Locker. I had died three times to finally see the garden.

I stood on the other side of a crystal clear stream, bubbling gently over stones. The garden had no gates. The river was its boundary. Its border. Its gate. I could see the tree from where I stood. It didn’t stand out from the others, didn’t bear fruit of extraordinary kind. I recognize it by the figure standing sentry in front of it, dull blade in its dead hand.

The angel. He wore dusty armour. A shield hung off his back. As I stared, the bones in his hand cracked. The blade fell to the ground at his feet. He was only a skeleton. I had lived three lifetimes to get to this point and he had died eons ago. The tree was unguarded.

The stream parted beneath my feet. Fresh flesh. Clean. Pure. Alive. The skeleton stared lifelessly as I passed. The fragile bones in its wings stretched twelve feet across. I picked up the sword. The dull blade was light as a feather, light as air. It no longer flamed. It no longer warded off mankind. I was the last. It didn’t recognize me.

I plucked a fruit from the tree and took a bite.

It was knowledge.
Flash Fiction - July 14

“[...]He placed on the east side of the Garden of Eden cherubim and a flaming sword flashing back and forth to guard the way to the tree of life.” Genesis 3:24, NIV.

Well I wrote a thing.

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mycrimsonheart "manages to say something profound in very little space" (suggester's words) in Eden's Angel. ( Suggested by creativelycliche and Featured by neurotype )
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TuesdayNightCompany Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2014
I liked it.
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Omnivoyance Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014
Gained knowledge from the tree of life? Not sure what you're going for with that. 
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mycrimsonheart Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I recognize my mistakes, as minor as they may be. But perhaps you might have noticed in other comments that I realized my mistake. Perhaps this story is fiction and isn't meant to reflect what one might or might not gain from eating fruit from either tree. Perhaps one can gain knowledge from immortality. Who knows. Perhaps those trees never existed. Fiction, myth. Not necessarily true. 
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Omnivoyance Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2014
No, I wasn't trying to point out a mistake. I assumed it was a twist on the established imagery and mythos meant to provoke thought in some general direction or another. But my sleepy mind refused to suggest what that might be in the time I had allotted to enjoy this piece. I enjoyed the story and thought it deserved some kind of comment. The last thought it caused was a question so I went with that. I thank you for responding in person with your authors "behinds the scenes" insight on the matter. I'm sorry if my comment came off as abrasive. I really did enjoy it and I thank you for sharing it with us. 
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mycrimsonheart Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I'm sorry if I appeared rude earlier, but I do appreciate you reading it. Thank you =)
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Omnivoyance Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2014
:) 
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That1PersonUForgot Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This story captured me from the first line until the last. Very well done in such small space. Congrats on the DD, it was very well earned~ :heart:
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mycrimsonheart Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! =)
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That1PersonUForgot Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You are very welcome, keep up the great work :)
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tommyboywood Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Interesting mythological spin.  You might check out my similar take in "The Seeker," in my spiritual folder
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